Sunday, April 27, 2014

Yeah Write Garblebuster: First Everythings


Those

frequently fleeting,

unmistakable,

“I knew exactly when you existed.”

moments

of

tentative glances,

shy smiles,

lips about to touch

firsts

awakening,

or often jolting,

one,

or five,

of your senses;

the wishing

you could bottle it,

and,

the wondering

what if?

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42 words answering the question:

Have all your clocks stopped?

from Alice Munro's short story A Real Life

34 comments:

Anonymous said...

love love love this saucy piece.

Unknown said...

whoa... looks so good to read!

~S(t)ri Writes

Kir said...

that first meet or that first person that makes your heart (and mind and life) race.
your words gave a soundtrack to those moments, to that instant where your life changes forever.

Gina said...

I know you love saucy (which is one of my favorite words by the way!)! Thanks!

Gina said...

And maybe sometimes it changes forjolly a fleeting moment, then it is gone, but you never forget. I still look for new and firsts. As a matter of fact, it was the intention of my yoga today. "New".

The first kiss, the first time your heart soars, or the first time you realize this person is "the one", there is NOTHING, no, like that!

Lance said...

I like the naked emotion, pure sexiness and the way it's all layed out. Great job.

About Last Weekend said...

Oh I like her and like your very evocative:

or five,

of your senses;

the wishing

you could bottle it,

Marcy said...

Oh, very sweet. This got me reminiscing.

Anonymous said...

But, if we could bottle those moments wouldn't they grow stale over time? Lose their potency? Lose their worth? ;-)
Great piece! An excellent use of your 42 allotted words.

Gina said...

Thanks!

Gina said...

That was my favorite part. Thanks, Jody!

Gina said...

Thank you, Marcy! Me, too! Always looking for special moments is a good thing!

Gina said...

I wouldn't want to bottle the actual moments BUT the feelingS of tentativeness, anticipation and excitement I had in those moments. It's the feeling. If it was bottled, and I was lonely, or whatever, I could put it in the perfume spots and conjure up purely the feeling of newness all over again.

Dana said...

I would take those beautiful fleeting moments every day! They never go stale.

Gina said...

Yes! Someone after my own heart. I'm hopelessly romantic. I recall fond or loving moments in time, even the heartache, with great frequency. They, after all, have made me me. The pure feeling in a bottle? Someone would be a zillionaire if the could figure it out.

Anonymous said...

Love this free spill of words. Well done.

Unknown said...

Moments that stay forever.Lovely take on the prompt Gina.

Anonymous said...

This was beautiful.

sue said...

wow - how did I miss this one earlier today - fantastic

Unknown said...

Wow! Those ephemeral emotions, I love them! :) Beautiful work, Gina.

Gina said...

I love the phrase "free spill of words". That's what it felt like. Thanks so much!

Gina said...

Our lives are a string of them. Some are better than others, but they all make up our lives.

Gina said...

You are so niiiiiice!

Gina said...

Thanks for your enthusiasm, Sue!

Gina said...

Thank you!

Gina said...

I love them, too, and will take those lovely and tingling feelings no matter if they only last a split-second! Thank you very much, Archita.

Jack said...

I liked the pacing and I like firsts. First week in a while that I have seen two posts close together. ;)

Robbie K said...

Gorgeous!!

Gina said...

Thanks! We have "firsts" in common then.

Watch out! You will definitely see one, or five, more this week ;-)!!!

Gina said...

Thank you, Robbie!

Jack said...

Looking forward to it.

Unknown said...

I loved "the wishing you could bottle it." Great romantic poem, Gina! Thanks for linking it up.

Atreyee said...

Yes,the million dollar question,"what if" :-)A thought provoking take on the prompt Gina and hey great to see you here -)

Suzanne said...

Oh wow, what a beautiful response to the prompt, Gina! :)