Wednesday, November 25, 2015

Yeah Write Micro-stories: Weekend Warriors

Tipping his Stetson to a final sunset, Doc turned Betty towards Lost Valley to pack.

He slapped a tip envelope on the desk.
“Gotta fix some teeth so I can return.” [Wink]

Shouldering his duffel, he walked out to the waiting taxi.


  1. At first I was..."Whaaaat?" And then light dawned. I got it! "Gotta fix some teeth.." was a great line. I thought it had a double meaning either "beat someone to death or within an inch of their their life for pay" as well as a dentist. :) Was that intentional?

    1. Initially, I wrote it as a dentist's escape from the reality of his daily drilling drudgery using "Doc" as the first clue also realizing it as a common cowboy moniker. At least in my mind it is. Then reading it over after, I thought it could definitely seem more sinister. So your question was totally legit!

      Thanks for stopping by!

  2. That would actually be a good escape for a dentist. Unless his horse had bad teeth. Then maybe not!

  3. Great case of misdirection! Totally had me thinking "Old West" until he walked out to the taxi.