Sunday, May 4, 2014

Yeah Write Garblebuster: Every Time I See a Crow



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Can't consider crows without thinking of Josephine.

("They're those who've crossed over.")

Hugging myself against the familiar shiver,

"Is it you?"

It whisper-shouts from its branch.

“What did you say? Tell me, please.”

All it does is caw,

again.

[teardrop]

"Damn you."

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42 words to answer the question:

Why do birds suddenly appear? 

(This question made famous by The Carpenters)

28 comments:

  1. So much potency in that teardrop, Gina. And the picture fits the prompt so well!

    Shailaja's post

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    1. An old neighbor (89 years old whose name was Josephine) told me this once about 20 years ago. I've never forgotten. And I think of her, and loved ones, whenever one crosses my path. Thanks for visiting.

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  3. Wow! Such an emotional wallop in 42 words. Well done, Gina!

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    1. Funny, those crows were the first thing that came to mind when I read the prompt. Thanks, Tina.

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  4. The tears came before I could stop them.
    I loved the pace and rhythm of this, and I just couldn't help but think of the people I'm missing too.

    such a beautiful, aching 42 words Gina. xo

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    1. For some reason, I kind of believe. I also think my dear MIL is the blue heron that shows up to visit me at the lake all the time (it was her favorite bird). I got a little Geary writing this. You are a doll, Kir!

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  5. Your stuff makes me smile - in a good way - loved the tear drop

    (I'm not able to post this week)

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    1. Such a sweet comment! Thank you, Sue. Hopefully you will join in next week. Thank you for visiting!

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  6. This is beautiful, Gina. The picture makes it all so complete.

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    1. Thanks! I originally had a different picture chosen of a crow. I like the idea of this being about a specific person, not the bird.

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  7. I totally believe that birds hold some sort of other worldly magic in them. I liked reading the back story in the comments, too. Well written!

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    1. I agree. It's a weird thing for me, but I totally believe the blue heron = my mother in law. And I mean this in the most beautiful way as a lovely memorial to her!

      My neighbor, Josephine, was Czechoslovakian. Maybe in her culture, it has real meaning. Thanks for the compliment as well!

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  8. Wow, this is amazing. You said so much in 42 words, I felt like I was reading an entire story!

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    1. Sam! That is so nice of you to say! I was hoping to achieve some semblance of a full story here.

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  9. This has a slight air of The Raven, though it is a crow. You captured a lt without having to say much. The teardrop was perfect where it fell in your piece.

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    1. Thank you, Renada. It felt like a sad piece to me. I cry often, so it felt natural to me.

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  10. It is juss a beautifully written good content...:)

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  11. Nice take on the prompt. You make every word count. Beautifully written!

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    1. This was one of those times were the idea flowed out easily, and we all know that doesn't always happen. Then again, it was not so easy to edit and fine tune within the 42-word perimeter.

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  12. Well done. Teardrop…one word, so important.

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