Saturday, September 29, 2012

Skinny Dipping, Partie Deux

Sleeplessness = Unplanned Trifextra Entry******************************************* For this weekend's Trifextra prompt, take one of our former 33 word entries and build upon it with another 33 words. Okedoke!!! ****************************** Something about this place; something about them alone in a rented Mackinaw cottage. Blistering heat at midnight seduced Gabby to skinny-dip purely to lower their bodies' heat breaking the awkwardness of their reconnection...... Conveniently clinging for warmth in black water, their familiarity felt like ghosts rushing through  intertwined bodies; riding a bike after far too long.  Whispering "I need you"s... Past encountering present. Wrong confronting right. www.trifectawritingchallenge.com
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12 comments:

  1. lumdog2012September 29, 2012 at 9:52 AM

    This is great. The first piece was subtly hot and you ratcheted it up a notch for this one! And, nice job bringing us more of this interesting story.

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    1. GinaSeptember 29, 2012 at 9:44 PM

      I love romantic stories that have some stress built into them. It's what I imagined would happen if two people in love went skinny dipping ;-)

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  2. BettyRants41September 29, 2012 at 10:25 AM

    I completely agree with lumdog. Loved this piece the first time. The addition really turns up the hear and intensity. Love it even more now.

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    1. GinaSeptember 29, 2012 at 9:46 PM

      It's what popped into my head at 3am! Kinda warm and intense, I guess. Could have turned it up even more but needed additional word allowance!

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  3. TMWHickmanSeptember 29, 2012 at 2:02 PM

    Oh my! I am fanning myself over here! Great stuff!

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    1. GinaSeptember 29, 2012 at 9:48 PM

      Oh, good! I was trying for some warm. Would need AC on cold for what I actually had in mind but didn't have the nerve to submit.

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  4. Whispering ThoughtsSeptember 29, 2012 at 2:33 PM

    Great continuity

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  5. Kenya G. JohnsonSeptember 29, 2012 at 5:40 PM

    Reading trifextra after trifextra, I am certain my heart rate it up!

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    1. GinaSeptember 29, 2012 at 9:50 PM

      What a perfect way to spend a Saturday afternoon...a rapidly beating heart. Yea!

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  6. The Gal HerselfSeptember 30, 2012 at 6:52 AM

    I love how you used the anonymity afforded by "midnight" (part one) and "dark water" (part two) to lower inhibitions.

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    1. GinaSeptember 30, 2012 at 10:24 AM

      Tapping tip of nose with finger...exactly why that time of day was used. Dark/black/ midnight = comfortable in their skin (particularly because its bare!).

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