Friday, June 22, 2012

Sunset at the Lake


Some people CAN really fly.

People experience things differently.

Some only watch as the world spins all around them.

Others actively take part and pursue what it has to offer.

 Sometimes, I do both but prefer one over the other.

Last night was a splendid example of such.

I experienced passion and beauty 

as I watched this boy gracefully plunge into the water at sunset.

It was the perfect setting,

on a perfect night,

and this perfectly orange sunset possessed and captivated me.


I couldn't tear my eyes away.


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For Friday, a short challenge from Write On Edge. Below are three fairly generic passive phrases. Your goal is to make them active in a short scene, either fiction or non-fiction. You can choose one, two, or all three to play with, but you only have 100 words.
1.[he/she/I] was devastated by [...]
2.[feeling] was experienced by [...]
3.[person/thing] was possessed by [...]

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18 comments:

  1. BarbaraJune 22, 2012 at 10:26 AM

    Hi Gina - great take on the prompt, it really creative a mood!

    One thing though: part of the prompt was to take the passive and make it active. And to continue writing in the active tense throughout.

    So instead of
    "Passion and beauty were experienced by me,"
    you want
    "I experienced passion and beauty"

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    1. GinaJune 22, 2012 at 10:32 AM

      Thanks for the suggestion, Barbara and I agree!

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  2. Kenya G. JohnsonJune 22, 2012 at 2:51 PM

    Excellent Gina. I looked for your line and I'm stopping by after the suggestion and correction. Great advice from Barbara and I love the picture you found to go with your writing.

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    1. GinaJune 22, 2012 at 2:55 PM

      Thanks, Kenya. Works better that way.

      That's Matthew, my son, in the picture taken on Wednesday night.

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    2. Kenya G. JohnsonJune 22, 2012 at 8:42 PM

      Wow. Now my suggestion is to put a caption under that photo. That makes it even more powerful. I got goosebumps when I read it again. That is absolutely beautiful. Who took the photo?

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    3. GinaJune 22, 2012 at 9:12 PM

      My husband is an awesome photographer and that was taken in that quick speed with multiple shutters per second. That was his fourth dive. We started as the sun was setting and that was at just about the last moment. PRICELESS! For a Mom, of course.

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  3. TMWHickmanJune 22, 2012 at 4:32 PM

    That picture is full of possibilities! I loved your take on the prompt, as usual. You're a great writer!

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  4. Shelton Keys DunningJune 22, 2012 at 6:09 PM

    Ooh lovely and serene. I couldn't tear away either. Well done!

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    1. GinaJune 23, 2012 at 12:03 AM

      Thanks. And I won't until the end of August!

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  5. Kathleen BasiJune 22, 2012 at 6:57 PM

    I can see why you were captivated!

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  6. Whispering ThoughtsJune 22, 2012 at 9:45 PM

    You have brought out the beauty of the moment so well.

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    1. GinaJune 23, 2012 at 12:04 AM

      Well thanks, Bubbling Arroyo! I gave it a shot!

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  7. AnonymousJune 23, 2012 at 12:48 PM

    nice one gina!

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  8. dontpanic2011June 25, 2012 at 6:05 PM

    A beautifully written piece to go with an amazing photograph. I agree - put on there that it's your son!! Great job.

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    1. GinaJune 25, 2012 at 8:03 PM

      Thank you Wisper. I will put it on there. It's a sweet picture.

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