Moonlight illuminated the pier like a stage.
A solitary teardrop fell making a ring in the dark water.
Her body sliced its glossy surface.
And she swam.
With no plan.
Fading into blackness.
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Stage Ring Water
Use these 3 and add 30 to total 33. These are this weekend's Trifextra rules.
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I am so glad you are back and writing. This was beautiful and telling. A moment of her own.
ReplyDeleteWELCOME BACK my friend.
Thanks, girl. Snuck this one in amongst the company arriving! You understood it precisely. We all need our moments by ourself. This one just happened to be in the middle of the night.
DeleteGood writing.
ReplyDeleteThanks, crystal!
DeleteLovely poem. It tells a much bigger story than the 33 words seemingly represent.
ReplyDeleteIt's about finding time. Thank you, lumdog.
DeleteYeah. I forgot to say, welcome back. I missed your creative and enjoyable pieces.
DeleteThanks again lumdog! I'm sort of here, maybe. Re-entry is going to be slow. Have to spend time with people right now instead of here. The time will come!
DeleteNo way! Welcome back! Hope you had a great trip. So glad to read your writing again!
ReplyDeleteHahaha! I missed you! Not back back but a little bit back. My trip was nothing short of absolutely amazing. At some point, somewhere, I need to spill my guts about it. Thanks for the enthusiastic welcome, Sam!
DeleteWelcome back for however long you can stay. Beautiful and eerie!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Tina. I love the water at night. My mind wanders. Stimulates the dark side of my imagination!
DeleteI imagined she was impulsively escaping an abusive spouse (or some other hopeless situation) under the cover of darkness. I think I watch too much Lifetime Movie Network.
ReplyDeleteBeautifully understated piece. :)
Oh! What's that creepy movie with Julia Roberts where she escapes in the water?
DeleteI have no idea if this woman was escaping anything or taking a few moments for herself.
Awesome imagery, and great use of "stage" in particular, imho.
ReplyDeleteHey, thanks!!! It's exactly what I think, what a moonlit pier looks like. Sometimes even a runway if the moon is right.
DeleteSometimes swimming without a plan is just what we need.
ReplyDeleteI'm more about swimming without a plan these days. Everything is always so structured. At least in my life. Lets see where the moment takes us.
Deletesometimes you just have to swim. :) Good to see your entry.
ReplyDeleteAnd swim! Thanks, Barbara!
DeleteAh! Beautiful... and agonizing. Loved your words..
ReplyDeleteOh! I love agonizing!!! That captures the emotion I was going for! I appreciate your comment very much!
DeleteBeautifully written Gina!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Susanne!
DeleteA wonderful use of the three words.
ReplyDeleteAhh ... A possible rediscovery of self ! Brilliant take on the prompt ...
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ReplyDeleteAnd she swam.
With no plan.
Fading into blackness.
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Your story brought peace and solace to my mind's eye...then I thought about a shark...yikes! This was a beautifully orchestrated 33 words and a romantic use of the prompts. Kudos :-)
ReplyDeleteYou paint the sadness so clearly. Great write!
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I love the thought of swimming off with no plan. Alone time can heal so much.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful work, Gina! You made the scene feel so real in so few words.
ReplyDeleteThank you for linking up!
I've been a horrible blog visitor. Boy do i miss your beautiful writing.
ReplyDeleteOh.. that is lovely. :-)
ReplyDeleteLots of emotion in this one. It's powerful. Well done!
ReplyDeleteI love this. You painted an incredible picture
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